untitled emotion...

[xxEmotionaLxx- <3 adele <3]

hey i know its long, but will you please take the time out to read it, and get back to me? tah :P


I’m sick of this
I’m really, fucking sick of it...
I feel no need to hold on
I just don’t care no more!
Fuck life!
For what its worth…
What is this all worth?
Its worth…nothing!
Its just-meaningless, confusion!
Hate and delusion
False love and false care
Broken promises, and unreal ‘despair’
False trust and false hope
A concealed noose in the rope
Fucked up shit
Fucked up people
Fucked up society
Fucked up humanity!
Fucked up dreams
And mixed emotions
So much hurt
And fake devotion
So much Hate
And false interpreted love
So many young hearts in ‘love’ with each other
So many young hearts, prone to be, shattered by, one another!
And you ‘love’
You love for the moment
and its all seemingly great
Until it all starts to fall apart
And your left, alone
To pick up the pieces of your shattered heart…
And its fucking horrible
The memories are terrible
But sometimes,
Sometimes you never get to see how it feels,
You never get to experience something so real
Something you’ve held so close for so long
And dreamt about
In the place you thought you’d belong And it all just shatters
Right in front of your eyes…
And they all say that you’ll be fine
And you know, that you wont this time
If its not them,
Its someone else
And its a vicious circle
Seems everyone’s for themselves
Your happy, just to become sad
You laugh, just to cry later on
I thought at first I was the only one
Now I know, I’m not the only one!
I know I’m not the only victim in this gun fight
I know that I’m, surrounded by so many others in clear sight
And In this downpour
I know I’m not the only one that gets hit
But some are just in it for the ride
They’re just in it for the taking
Some just don’t care!
You promise things will work out in the end!
You always say stuff that’s, just pretend!
I should never have trusted you
When you said my wounds would heal
Maybe they did
But the scars will never fade
The memories are still here
The proof is left
And the hurt lingers, so near
The pain still remains
Inside of me, and it craves
It craves the need to be seen
Seeping out every moment I’m alive, into this scene…
Still fighting to be visible
Through my fake smile and all
And through my false laughter!
But, you see there’s no need to fight strongly
It doesn’t take long, doesn’t take much
To break me…
Just give me the knife
Make it easier for me this once
My mission is to bleed, for you!
For them!
For a reason!
No, not for a reason
For a million reasons!
For the countless words that were never said
For the reasons of the prior bloodshed
Will i ever feel the same
Will i ever feel the need to regain
What I’ve lost?
Or am I better of alone?
Better off knowing what’s real?
Instead of something unknown
Better off being able to believe instead of doubting everything?
But at least they cant pretend to save me
At least I’m at my own devices
But who can save me from myself?
When I sacrifice my life?
I’m giving up on this
I’m giving up on you
Ill lie myself beneath this ground
Bury myself from plain view
Hide myself away,
So far away from YOU!
Ready to be forgotten forever…
Giving up on me?
Are you?
Giving up on me?
Either way
I’m still giving up on this
Giving up on...everything!
Have you no faith in what I am?
(I couldn’t blame you!)
And have you no faith,
In all that I’ve become?
(I do, I praise you)
Cant you see what I’ve become?
Or don’t you want to see?
No, You don’t need to see!
Just throw me away!
Throw me away!
With these memories…
Give up!
Give up on me!
Give up!
Give up for me,
Or even for yourself?
And save yourself!
I know you were the one
Who treated me so bad
I know you were the one that tore me apart
But the truth is I still care
The truth is that I still need you
No matter how much you’ll never need me
How can I say?
How the fuck can I say?!
I ‘love’ you, anyway?
When I don’t know ‘love’, at all!
I never said id learn the lesson!
Always said id learn,
The hard way!
We learnt the hard way!
I learnt the hardest,
I fought the longest!
But you were the strongest…
And the pain,
Did it?
It did, prevail…

tah once again, please tell meh what ya thinks :P xXx

[Erin]

well that had a couple of cliched lines.. but they flowed really nicely. I liked how you were consistent in being inconsistent if that makes sense. like what you said related the whole time but the structure varied and flowed. there was the basic rhyming and words and you made it work. I like it. I like how you accentuated certains words so we knew which were more *pow* and I could just sense the emotion coming through. this is something I would imagine hearing while someone's playing bongos in the background.

but yeah over all I really liked it. there are some grammatical mistakes mostly missing apostrophes, and capitalization.. and a couple of lines that I've definitely heard before. but you made them work so I don't think you have to change them around too much..

also I liked how you just kept going ... most people would be like

"this if fucked up
you suck
I suck
I give up
you still suck
this is fucked up...."

but you kept going with different words describing it and you made sure that the person you were telling it to got the message. it's definitely very interesting. keep up the good work...

I'm probably one of the few that would read all of that lol...

*two thumbs up dude*

[Jessie]

wow...that really was long!

Anywhore, Id just liek to compliment you on this....i forgot what to call it...uh..Stanza, Is it?
well, This :

You love for the moment
and its all seemingly great
Until it all starts to fall apart
And your left, alone

I really loved that, Because, Its so true.


I loved all the mixed emotions that were put into that.

You done a truely amazing job!
<3333

[xxEmotionaLxx- <3 adele <3]

aww thankies people, critisim/'praise' is most welcom tah once again! xXx <3